Friday, March 14, 2008

Alliterative Loss (14-Mar-2008)

When I saw this week's Friday 5 at Poefusion, my choice of topic was obvious. My lost love has such a finely freckled face that I was immediately stuck writing an alliterative poem about my loss. As the lazy poet that I am, I also saw this as an opportunity to use the Writer's Island prompt of Spellbound because that is what she has done to me.

This may be the first time I have used such heavy alliteration in poetry and it turned out to be quite a challenge.

Alliterative Loss

Her finely freckled Face
fomented my feckless fate.
A suasion skilled sylph
singing simple siren songs.

Her cunningly crafted Cage
kindly corrected my careless course.
A riotous reckless rage
reducing reason to rabble.

Her dainty dipper Dots
delighted my deepest desire.
A hellish hunting harpy
holds my hapless heart.

Her fizzy fun Fellowship
found my forgotten fuel.
A leeched littered life
leaving Love's labor lost.

16 comments:

paisley said...

absolutely alluring alliteration.... why do i wish you name was alphonse????

Michelle Johnson said...

You have done a very nice job with your alliterative poem. And, your other links led to a nice write up as well. The little dipper is a unique set of freckles. Have a nice night.

Richard said...

love the "riotous reckless rage reducing reason to rabble..."

gautami tripathy said...

Marvellous alliteration. It was a pleasure to read this!

dried piece of toast

~beth ♥ said...

"A hellish hunting harpy
holds my hapless heart."

Well done! I suffer in my attempts to use prompts. Kudos to you for being able to utilize them to great affect.

tumblewords said...

Well-worded write! Strangely sensible. Nicely nuanced!

anthonynorth said...

Powerful poignant poem
followed by
cleverly crafted comments
but I'll resist the urge ...
damn! :-)

texasblu said...

i love your alliteration poem. i haven't tried that in ages - it's very enjoyable. :)

Jeques said...

Great job! Aptly chosen words and the playful sounds it create added a certain effect to the mind.

I wish you well.

~ Jeques

jadey said...

I hope that in time you will find love once again.

OneMoreBeliever said...

for such tiny little things the freckle has definitely caught you in her net... her fizzy fun fellowship i like...

rebecca said...

altogether alliteratively alluring....:)

good job!

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