Friday, March 14, 2008

Alliterative Loss (14-Mar-2008)

When I saw this week's Friday 5 at Poefusion, my choice of topic was obvious. My lost love has such a finely freckled face that I was immediately stuck writing an alliterative poem about my loss. As the lazy poet that I am, I also saw this as an opportunity to use the Writer's Island prompt of Spellbound because that is what she has done to me.

This may be the first time I have used such heavy alliteration in poetry and it turned out to be quite a challenge.

Alliterative Loss

Her finely freckled Face
fomented my feckless fate.
A suasion skilled sylph
singing simple siren songs.

Her cunningly crafted Cage
kindly corrected my careless course.
A riotous reckless rage
reducing reason to rabble.

Her dainty dipper Dots
delighted my deepest desire.
A hellish hunting harpy
holds my hapless heart.

Her fizzy fun Fellowship
found my forgotten fuel.
A leeched littered life
leaving Love's labor lost.

16 comments:

paisley said...

absolutely alluring alliteration.... why do i wish you name was alphonse????

poefusion said...

You have done a very nice job with your alliterative poem. And, your other links led to a nice write up as well. The little dipper is a unique set of freckles. Have a nice night.

Anonymous said...

love the "riotous reckless rage reducing reason to rabble..."

Anonymous said...

Marvellous alliteration. It was a pleasure to read this!

dried piece of toast

Unknown said...

"A hellish hunting harpy
holds my hapless heart."

Well done! I suffer in my attempts to use prompts. Kudos to you for being able to utilize them to great affect.

Tumblewords: said...

Well-worded write! Strangely sensible. Nicely nuanced!

anthonynorth said...

Powerful poignant poem
followed by
cleverly crafted comments
but I'll resist the urge ...
damn! :-)

Pirate Princess said...

i love your alliteration poem. i haven't tried that in ages - it's very enjoyable. :)

Jeques said...

Great job! Aptly chosen words and the playful sounds it create added a certain effect to the mind.

I wish you well.

~ Jeques

Head Cookie said...

I hope that in time you will find love once again.

little wing writer said...

for such tiny little things the freckle has definitely caught you in her net... her fizzy fun fellowship i like...

rebecca said...

altogether alliteratively alluring....:)

good job!

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